new thesis statement and introduction

Thesis: Christopher Columbus known as the great discoverer of the Americas whom many call one the greatest navigators of the sea, a man of such greatness he is celebrated every year in America for discovering America. He was neither ,and I don’t believe he deserves his own holiday. He luckily reached the islands on the outskirts of America ,and when he did he found hospitable host who fed his hungry and thirsty crew. The same crew he ordered to enslave these hospitable host and made them search for gold that was rightfully owned by the naive Americans. He wanted the gold for his own benefit.

Introduction:Christopher Columbus took three ships and traveled west across the Atlantic Ocean searching for a new route to Asia but with a crew on the verge of death he luckily found land on the outskirts of America. Where he found the hospitable natives who he called Indians because of his foolish navigating skills he actually believed he was in India. The same natives that fed his hungry crew were the same natives he enslaved. Why is this cruel manipulative man called the discoverer of a land he has never been on in his life or even the discoverer of land that as originally the Indians. Should Christopher Columbus be celebrated?you decide.